Sunday, September 14, 2014

There Goes the Neighborhood


We were minding our own business and everything was going well, until the dreadful settlers came into our land. They are very greedy and trade us many useless things for our cherished items. We give them animals, cotton, and weapons. They give us useless glass balls and cheap fabrics. We treat them nicely and expect the same in return. They were very useless without their tools and luxuries , so we helped them by teaching them the ways of nature. Grow crops, build tools, hunt animals. But all they want is to convert us into their beliefs of Christianity. Why should we believe in their god when they ruin ours? We believe in the nature that surrounds us, to take good care of the trees, rivers, and animals and we shall be rewarded. Instead they come and chop down trees plow the land to build houses and try to claim our land. They start to get more violent with each day, they kidnapped some of our brothers to use as slaves. They plan to overrun us and claim our land, we believe that land isn't claimed. The land is for everyone to utilize.

3 comments:

  1. Be careful about switching back from past and present tenses throughout your writing, try to stick with one tense. Believable thought process of a Native American that you were writing in the perspective of.

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  2. "Why should we believe in their God when they ruin ours?", that was super interesting to me. You have a way of capturing the reader while you portray the character as a somewhat angry, or concerned Indian. Overall, I love the way u set up the blog to be a story but try not to use the word "useless" 3 sentences in a row again lol.

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  3. The way you made the reader feel as if he or she where there, is a very remarkable feat in your blog post. You did a great job putting us in the perspective of the natives.

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